I've written a potential script of what could be said in my trailer, but after writing it, I gained more ideas on how to approach the trailer. But here's what I've written down anyway for dialogue...
Green = Significant dialogue to consider using.
Orange = Nah, I won't use that.
Green = Significant dialogue to consider using.
Orange = Nah, I won't use that.
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Marian: ...Lights... Camera... Action...
Marian: No... I'd want to wait it out and make sure he's right for me before I
even kiss him... Like in one of those romance films.
Maybe:
[Watching a saucy scene in a show, but closes the laptop lid. Reads some saucy
words, closes the document and looks disgusted.] Why do women do that...
Is there something missing from my life...
Marian: Can't I just be free to do what other people do? Have normal problems,
and liberties, like... going out, having fun... getting a boyfriend.
Marian: I just want to be seen as beautiful, or desirable to someone.
Marian: I can't be sneaking around anymore, I hardly knew him! I tried for him but
he was too caught up in his own depression to even see the love I was giving him.
He just turned and gave me a necklace, as if I were some prostitute...
[opens laptop]
Marian: [types to a guy] Hey there....
[cross cutting to her online]
Marian: But maybe I am...
[cross cutting of Shea abusing her]
but without payment.
[Goes on with everyday life... Loss of confidence...]
Friend: Are you alright?
Marian: [defensive] Yes--yes! I'm fine. [forces a smile]
[opens a laptop, more captions of flirty conversation]
Dude1: Oooh... that photo. I didn't expect that.
Marian: It was something I used to hate the idea of, women degrading themselves in such
a way! But you know what? It was fun, alright. I felt free for once, and sexy and
desirable! It escalated so quickly I forgot where it really began!
Dude3: C'mon, oh Marian, you're so good at this.
Marian: Marian... stop this now... before you lose yourself completely!
Marian: Wanna play honey...?
Dude3: Thats gorgeous...
Shea's voice: Ugh... I'm losing interest...
Shea's voice: Kissing's boring now.
Dude 1: So beautiful...
[Marian trying to pray, but cannot]
Marian: [slowly] In the name of the father, and of the son and--- Errgh! I can't--!
[Watches movies... watches loving couples...] what am I doing...
Marian: I told him in confidence what I've been doing... because I wanted to warn him of
how I could be and that I wanted to change. But...
Dude4: Could I have what the other guys got?
Marian: No!....
Yes...
Sis: [knocks on bathroom door] Marian, what're you doing in there?
Marian: N-nothing!!!
Dudes: I'm starting to get feelings for you... Are they actually worth keeping?
Marian: All I am is abusing their feelings...This... isn't exciting for me anymore.
It feels so easy all of a sudden. Just to drop the clothes off, play a part, do whatever
they say... Am I dissensertised?
Dude4: Do you think you could shave more?
Marian: That's rather personal to say. I'm literally giving myself to you and all you
could say is that? How rude!
Dude4: All I'm doing is saying a preference. No need to be a bitch about it!
Marian: I don't want to do this anymore... but I can't stop. It's all I know what to do,
now... I feel like some broken doll.
Marian: I remember a time I used to just talk with guys... just talk and have a laugh...
Is this the new 'talking' for me?
[pause...]
[celebration with friends]
[meets a gentlemanly guy]
Guy: You know those things shouldn't feel comfortable for you... I just want to get to
know you for you.
[Showing them being happy and getting to know each other... the scenes with the gentleman
could be incorporated throughout the darker parts of the trailer too]
Marian: It feels like you've saved a part of me.
Marian: Could I ever be the girl I used to be..?
Marian: I'm glad I experienced this. Because now I understand those who do it. I can't
judge people anymore.
judge people anymore.
Marian: I can't talk much. I can't have them hear me...
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What's in green are the quotes that're especially important; the significant parts of her journey and what the lads said to her and their different personalities coming through.
I've had this conversation with Megan, and as a member of the audience I'd be aiming the trailer towards, I found this conversation rather significant for the structure of my trailer:
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